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The Forgotten Court Yard
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Literature Text
Rain, rolling down
Out from the gloomy sky
With in minutes
The ground is dark and vibrant
Like a saturated sponge
Filled with multicoloured bubbles
I look at the aqua-ed ground
The dirt all dark and moist
As if it is
a warm chocolate cake
But above the earth
Are blossoms of vibrant green wonder
and so chilling is the sight
To see such benevolent contrast
Below the iridescent clouds
A memorial of the almost fogotten ones
Claim the center stage
In an almost undramatic way
And a slight edging smile
Appears across my face
As I ponder
Oh how the would feel and think
of this beauty of contrast......
If they were still living
Out from the gloomy sky
With in minutes
The ground is dark and vibrant
Like a saturated sponge
Filled with multicoloured bubbles
I look at the aqua-ed ground
The dirt all dark and moist
As if it is
a warm chocolate cake
But above the earth
Are blossoms of vibrant green wonder
and so chilling is the sight
To see such benevolent contrast
Below the iridescent clouds
A memorial of the almost fogotten ones
Claim the center stage
In an almost undramatic way
And a slight edging smile
Appears across my face
As I ponder
Oh how the would feel and think
of this beauty of contrast......
If they were still living
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Hey there,
Prettyflour here on behalf of 
with the critique you requested.
I love the story you tell in this poem- your courtyard has captured my attention. I especially liked the second stanza- beautiful imagery there! Grammar note- the "with in' in the the first stanza should be 'Within'
I hope this is helpful. Thank you so much for sharing your words! 