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The Light Upon the Grass
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A coat the color of sunshine
A soul the essence
of a glorious sunbeam
A smile the musings
of a brilliant sunrise
She laughed and played
like a curious sprite
with an everlasting smile
dancing across her face
to make the days bearable
in the best kind of way
She snored peacefully
amidst her fun-filled dreams
Her love coursed our veins
as she stamped her nose
in loving approval
But her smile
finally evolved into a sunset
and the soul
like all sunbeams
had to recede
as day turned to night
Her sunshine got clocked
in for ever darkness
Our beloved Bluegrass
A soul the essence
of a glorious sunbeam
A smile the musings
of a brilliant sunrise
She laughed and played
like a curious sprite
with an everlasting smile
dancing across her face
to make the days bearable
in the best kind of way
She snored peacefully
amidst her fun-filled dreams
Her love coursed our veins
as she stamped her nose
in loving approval
But her smile
finally evolved into a sunset
and the soul
like all sunbeams
had to recede
as day turned to night
Her sunshine got clocked
in for ever darkness
Our beloved Bluegrass
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Hey there,
Prettyflour here on behalf of
with the critique you requested.
Loved your first stanza- a wonderful light feeling throughout. The next two stanzas feel playful and fun. The last stanza is both beautiful and sad. Such a lovely poem. I would't change a thing. I'm so sorry to hear about Bluegrass! I have a dog myself (a black Lab) and she is more than just a pet- she's part of my family. I would't be the same without her.
Such a nice tribute. Beautiful!
Prettyflour here on behalf of
with the critique you requested.Loved your first stanza- a wonderful light feeling throughout. The next two stanzas feel playful and fun. The last stanza is both beautiful and sad. Such a lovely poem. I would't change a thing. I'm so sorry to hear about Bluegrass! I have a dog myself (a black Lab) and she is more than just a pet- she's part of my family. I would't be the same without her.
Such a nice tribute. Beautiful!